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英语专业四级写作中,增强语句表现力的有效方法

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英语专业四级写作中,增强语句表现力的有效方法

一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。
  1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如:
  Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab.
  Revision: The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)
  Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (转换为并列结构作后置定 语)

  2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如:
  1) Weak: The team members are good players.
  Revision: The team members play well.
  2) Weak: One worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.
  Revision: One worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.

  3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中,把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例 如:
  1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.
  Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.
  2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.
  Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

  
二、多用语意具体的动词,保持句意简洁明了。
例如:
  1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.
  Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.
  2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.
  Better: She compares prices and quality.

  
三、尽量运用主动语态
。例如:
  1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.
  Better: Charity has supported the organization.
  2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.
  Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

  
四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。
例如:
  1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.
  Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.
  2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.
  Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.
  3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
  Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.
  4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.
  Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

  
五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。
例如:
  1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.
  Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.
  2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.
  Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.