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从专八翻译真题看如何翻译(1)

2011-10-11来源:和谐英语

从专八翻译真题解析看如何翻译(1)

真题:

得病以前,我受父母宠爱,在家中横行霸道,一旦隔离,拘禁在花园山坡上一幢小房子里,我顿感打入冷宫,十分郁郁不得志起来。一个春天的傍晚,园中百花怒放,父母在园中设宴,一时宾客云集,笑语四溢。我在山坡的小屋里,悄悄掀起窗帘,窥见园中大千世界,一片繁华,自己的哥姐,堂表弟兄,也穿插其间,个个喜气洋洋。一霎时,一阵被人摒弃,为世所遗的悲愤兜上心头,禁不住痛哭起来。

解析:

阅学生之译文,发现有一个问题值得我们教师注意,即如何在动笔翻译前,能迅速正确地确定英译的主语。如:

1.得病以前,我受父母宠爱,在家中横行霸道。

学生译文(以下简称“学译”):Before the illness,I was much petted by parents,doing everything at will in the home.

学译:Before I became ill,I have received all the favor of my parents,just like a little tyrant at home.

参考译文:Before I fell ill,I had been the bully under our roofs owing to my doting parents.

我们知道,汉语表达大多为“意合”结构,结构松散,以一个一个看似并列的短句“拼凑而成,彼此逻辑关系不明显;但英语则不同于汉语,它是形合语言,非常讲究句子内部的逻辑关系的”外化“,所谓”外化“,即,使用Connectives来表现其逻辑关系。我国译界有一个著名比喻:汉语句子的结构像”竹竿“,是一节接一节的;而英语句子则像”葡萄“,主干很短,而”挂“在上面的附加成分则很多。可以说,汉译英的过程,是一个由”竹竿“向”葡萄“转换的过程。首先要确定”一节接一节“的汉语句子,选其中的哪一节为英句的”(葡萄)主干“。

上面的汉语原句就含有一定的逻辑关系。“受父母宠爱”是因,而“在家中横行霸道”则是果。“果”应是全句的重心,英译上句,“(葡萄)主干”当选定“在家中横行霸道”而非学生译文所选的“我受父母宠爱”。

2.一旦隔离,拘禁在花园山坡上一幢小房子里,我顿感打入冷宫,十分郁郁不得志起来。

学译:When isolated and taken into custody in a small house on the hillside of our garden,I felt like I was abandoned,getting more and more depressed.

学译:As soon as I was kept apart in a small flat built on the hillside in the garden,I suddenly felt being consigned to limbo,gloomily and disappointedly.

参考译文:Feeling like being deposed into a cold palace,I began to taste the bitterness of depression and frustration immediately after I was segregated and confined in a small house on a hillside in our garden.

汉语原句有“四节”,哪一部分应该成为英句之“主干”?“我顿感打入冷宫”,还是“十分郁郁不得志起来”?学译都把“我顿感打入冷宫”处理为“主干”,而参考译文则反其道而行之。细细分析,“十分郁郁不得志起来”和“我顿感打入冷宫”,两者也有主次关系。显然,“十分郁郁不得志起来”为主,“我顿感打入冷宫”为次。两者之间,不仅存在时间先后的顺序,而且还存在着逻辑上的“因果”。因此,参考译文处理得当。另一个值得参考之处在于:“主干”(I began to taste the bitterness of depression and frustration)的前后均有附加成分,句子显出“平衡美”。